Urns



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The yarn of a blest

Deep in the chest, holds our mourn

For the Ash of gone.
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This is my first ever try at poetry. So please leave your comments and suggestions to improve. 
This post is linked to the HAIKU HEIGHTS weekly haiku prompts. Hope this follows Haiku, or Senryu norms. 
Photo courtesy: Discarded clay urns, Bhag Nari,... by Ameer Hamza (flickr.com) via Goole Image Search.
P.S: Read on Burial urns. 


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46 comments:

  1. There's something faintly reminiscent of the work of e e cummings in this piece. Enigmatic!


    My Take on the Prompt

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  2. I am not sure about the meaning of the the poem (always had problems with difficult words) but sounds like a warning that one day everything finishes!

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  3. Short and crisp! Had to look up the meaning of Blest... Learned a new word. Thanks!

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  4. haikus are very difficult is what i've heard

    i couldn't get the poem's meaning but that's just me :)

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  5. that picture is very inspiring, can see why you picked it

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  6. The poem says a lot! So true...a nice attempt on poetry, I guess you should write poem more often :)

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  7. i got what you are trying to say and thats what matters in poetry that you shoul be able to convey your message to the reader....good attempt..keep it up..

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  8. @Magical Mystical Teacher~ Did you mention Edward Estlin Cummings? I'm already in cloud 9. thank you.

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  9. @sunil deepak~ thank you. I've added a post script lately. Please consider reading the poem once more.

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  10. @Nisha~ Thank you. It was 'blessed' when I wrote first then thought "blest" would be a better alternative.

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  11. @Sujatha Sathya~ Thank you. I've added a post script lately. Please consider reading the poem once more.

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  12. @zongrik~ thank you. I owe it to the owner of the picture. Ameer Hamza on flickr.com

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  13. @Gargi Gupta~ Thank you. That was really inspiring.

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  14. @alka narula~ thank you for the inspiring words. will surely keep your advise in mind every time I attempt poetry.

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  15. Only suggestion, please continue writing poems. You wrote this Haiku with a lot of depth. Not only the words even the picture is excellent which makes the entire post a delightful experience for your readers.

    I have read two more Haikus on the same subject last week. So, I can say I really admire your treatment...

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  16. Am not at all a poet yaa...but the one suggestion i can offer is expand your thoughts.. stretch them to the point where they appear alien..this is a very good start...heres wishing you all the best :) happy journey...

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  17. very nice attempt...u have fallen for a very enticing enlightening form of art...have a mesmerising journey :)

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  18. 3 line wonder!! first poem jargon broken, no blunder!
    wow leo.!!! you have it!!! :)

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  19. and the theme goes right to the heart. :)

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  20. Hey Leo, loved the way u managed to evoke a variety of emotions with just so few words.. I'd say tht in itself is brilliant, considerin its ur first attempt at poetry.. very, very deep man...:)

    ur first poem RoaRs, LeoPaw!! :)

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  21. God attempt, the picture speaks a thousand words.

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  22. Wonderful poetry that described a part of life so well.

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  23. @Saru Singhal~ Will surely continue to explore more. Those words mean a lot to me especially when it comes from a proficient poet and a connoisseur like you. And that really makes my day!! Thank you so much.

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  24. @India's no.1 blog : Thank you and will surely keep that in mind.

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  25. @maliny: thank you and welcome here.
    Simply true. a very enticing enlightening form of art. will surely try exploring more.

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  26. @blackandwhiteheart~ Thank you. That was really encouraging. Glad you liked it.

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  27. @R-A-J~ Thank you Raj. Happy that you liked it. The truth is, I simply wrote down what came to my mind. It was only after completion, I started thinking about the meaning and depth. :)

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  28. @Vikram~ Thank you vikram. I owe it to the owner of the picture. Ameer Hamza on flickr.com.

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  29. @Neeraj Kumar~ Thank you Neeraj. Glad you like it.

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  30. That was deep. Very well expressed in very few words. :):)

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  31. So short! Yet so meaningful... Amazing... Keep em coming...

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  32. Short but meaningful..
    Somehow second and third line came at same level so poem seemed out of symmetry.

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  33. @AKSHAY KUMAR G~ Thank you Akshay. :)

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  34. @NNNiiiXXX~ Thank you NNNiiiXXX. :)

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  35. @Abha Midha~ Thank you Abha Midha. :)

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  36. @Aakash @ Love poems: Aakash, so happy to get that comment from a wonderful poet like you. Thanks a lot.

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  37. @Rahul Bhatia~ thank you Rahul. :)

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  38. @bemoneyaware: Sure will keep that suggestion in mind in my next attempt. thanks a lot.

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  39. he he good attempt! :) I'm your new follower :)

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